Relationships can make some people happy, depending on the kind of relationship we are talking about. It could be a relationship with your friends, parents or partner. In this paper I will discuss the impact of technology on relationships and how is affecting our life now days. Many people is now using the internet and social networks to meet new people or to find new dates. It works for some people but not for everyone, some people ends up very disappointed. It is not as easy as it sounds the outcomes are not always good.
Technology is everywhere now days, people is taking advantage of this to create social networks for people who are interested in meeting new people. Using the internet to find dates and meeting new people is now becoming more interesting for some people rather than going out with others to meet new people. It is not a bad idea, but you can’t always be sure that the person that you meet online will be the same when you meet in person.A lot of couples met started talking in the internet and are now together. But here are also others out there with other intentions than just finding a date. Using social networks such as “facebook” or “myspace” have many users that are not real, they could be fake or even worst predators looking for teens and abuse them. As you can see using such thing to meet new people could have good outcomes but also bad ones too.
Most people has the idea of finding that perfect other half that would match them and will make them happy. That is the idea of using social networks but haven't you wonder how often that occurs?
Hey your paper is really cool, watch out for small grammar errors though. I totally agree on a lot of the things you said especially about people being disappointed when internet dating. I think you can make your thesis a little better if you phrased it more like this: “in modern society, technology has a large impact relationships as well as a great effect on our day to day life.” You can follow up by saying in this paper I will be discussing the cause and effect of such impacts. Also to avoid having a bunch of sentence fragment in your paper try re phrasing what you’re writing for example, you wrote: “Many people is now using the internet and social networks to meet new people or to find new dates. It works for some people but not for everyone, some people ends up very disappointed.” This sentence is a fragment and can be easily fix by writing: “Many people are now using the internet and social networks to meet new people or to find new dates. This method may work for some people, but not for everyone some people just end up very disappointed.” All in all this paper seems really good just don’t forget to reread you paper out loud it is sometimes easier to catch mistakes when you can actually hear how it sounds.
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